Wednesday, June 29, 2011

Chapter 6 the writing cycle


Chapter 6:  The Writing Cycle
This chapter deals with the cycle that writers go through to produce a final written project.    The objective is to find a process that works for them, not give them a set process that has no meaning to them.
Everyone has his own way of warming up or prewriting.  Most will look for ideas in different places or by conferring with others.  This prewriting process is basically a rehearsal.
Rough drafting:  To increase writing fluency, and get rid of slopping writing.  This is where the correct spelling and content should be worked on.
Revising:  Have students look at their work and make possible changes:
1.     Change the beginning.
2.     Change the ending.
3.     Add a section
4.     Delete a section
5.     Change the order
6.     Change the genre
7.     Change the point of view
8.     Change the tone
9.     Change the tense
10. Slow down the “hot spot”
11. Focus on one part
12. Break a large piece into chunks or chapters
Students may want to try some of these ideas to revise their work.   The teacher can make suggestions and them how does it sound written in this way.  In the end, it is their writing so it will have to be their work.
Proofreading:  Have the students read to an audience of their peers to help them make corrections.
Publishing can be as simple as a letter to a parent or friend.  The writing can accompany an art work or  diagram.

A DAY INTHE LIFE OF MY DOG SNOW




Every morning, I get up with mom and go and get the newspaper. Mom carries me so I don’t have to get my feet dirty.   I sit under the table while mom and grandma eat breakfast.  Mom crushes my glucosamine Condition table so I can swallow it.   Mom said I need to take this everyday to prevent arthritis.  I don’t like it but I swallow it and get a cookie for being a good doggie.
Most days, I sit at the bathroom door and watch my mom get ready for work.  I use my saddest expression but it doesn’t help. I’m always hoping that she is going to take me riding.  I know mom feels bad that she has to go out again without me.  I just go and ask grandma to take me outside so I can fell the fresh air and do my thing and christen any new doggie scents.   If mom comes home around 4:00, I get to go for a walk.  I love going to our neighbors because there are three dogs there.  Two are Pomeranians so they are bigger than me.  The other female dog is a mixed breed and she’s small like me.  I want to play with Koa and Moche but they are too hyperactive for my tastes.  I would like a mellow friend to play with but mom says we have to wait until we build our own house.
Now that it’s summer, mom will give me a hair cut so I can stay cool.   She’s not a groomer so I hope I don’t end up looking like a scraggly hyena.  Maybe she can talk
Aunty Evelyn into doing the trimming for her.  Aunty Evelyn is a good hair cutter and does everyone’s hair in our family.
Aunty Eve wanted mom to get me fixed but mom said “no” as it would not make me stop christening those places where other doggies have sprayed.   Our Neighbor said her two Pomeranians are fixed but they still spray everywhere.  I’m glad mom doesn’t want me to be neutered.  Eventually, I would like to see my little offspring’s
Around town.  Mom says I’m a smart dog so breeding does count.  She has my papers so can prove my lineage, not that anyone will really care.


Tuesday, June 28, 2011

Summary of Tuesday's lesson


Summary of Tuesday’s lesson
Shawna gathered our writings for our collected works booklet that will be printed out as our final collection of works.
Beatrice gave us another trip into Hawaiian songs by playing the piano and leading us through a sing along.  She then had us write our own Mele Aloha after going through a lesson on tempo and beats.
Tamara read us another inspiring story about a child with Down syndrome that touched out hearts.  We then spent some time writing about a memorable person in our lives.  Shawna told us about the E-Anthology website but the computers couldn’t get a link up at the school so most of the students went with Shawna to Starbucks with their laptops to continue working and the rest of us had lunch and went home to work on our pieces.
The group decided that I would do the last lesson once again and we would have our Thursday gathering in the cafeteria.
We are all looking forward to our collected works booklet and our final day in writing class.

Blossom of Life


Blossom of Life
When my advisory students came to me for the first time at the beginning of 2011, I thought to myself what a diverse group.  Each student is a story in himself but Blossom was unique.  She would come to class tardy everyday because of her hip problem.   At this time, I had no idea of her hip until the last day of school.  We would wait until the end of advisory to turn the absence slip in because she would often come in with a tardy note.  Blossom, like her parents, tended to be very intelligent but a bit overweight.  I can only speculate that it was due to heredity and some of it from poor eating habit.
When Easter approached, our  7th grade team decided to plan different activities for team building.   One of these was a bunny race.  The entire class wanted Kamisese because he was a good athlete and a fast runner.  Blossom said she wanted to do it and she had bunny ears on nearly every day.
The class grumbled but I told them it was only fair to let other people participate as Kamisese had already run for us in other events.   We also needed to show fairness to all our students.   As it turned out, all the students from every advisory had to line up behind their representative and do the Bunny Hop!   Put your left leg out put your left leg in, do the boogie- woogie and turn yourself about and that’s what it’s all about!  It was so totally unexpected and fun.
As the months progressed, students who wanted to participate in the spelling bee had to sign-up at our library.  They went through several sessions of elimination.  Eventually, two students were selected to represent our school but Blossom was not one of them.   She did have a lot of fun try nonetheless.
When the student lead conference began and it was her turn, both of her parents came to class with her.  She went through the formalities of introductions and proceeded to go through her GLO’s and showed her examples of her various class-works.  After the conference ended they were allowed to ask questions.  They asked me about the bus driver.   They said that Blossom’s driver was not waiting for the students to be seated before driving off.   Unfortunately, Blossom has a bad hip and the sudden movement causes her to fall.  This happened daily so I told them that it needed to be reported to our V. P.    I later saw them in the V. P.’s office.
I did not find out what transpired from that confrontation but I did meet them again at Mahalo night.  I went up to greet them and commented on how bright and sweet Blossom is.  She came to my class on the last day of school for students and gave me a gift and sang a song she had written for me. It was lovely.
The nice thing about Blossom is she does not care what the other kids say.  She dresses to please her and her and her friends go about their own daily business.
On the last day of school while they had a captive audience, she and her friends did a dance routine for the student body.   They did have fun and the audience enjoyed watching them.
Blossom is a late bloomer with the natural attributes to become a beauty when she grows up.  All she needs to learn is poise and some formal dressing hints.  Unfortunately, kids tend to be mean and critical at this age and it takes maturity and wisdom to learn to be more tolerant and accepting of others.
I, for one, feel very blessed to have had her in my advisory.   The origami set she gave me has given me the incentive to hone my origami skills.  

Fingers of spirits
An emerald in the rough
Inspirer of skills

Mele Aloha

Mele Aloha for Anthony
By Colleen Wallis
You were a cute baby
Your strong caress full of love
Crawling was never a milestone
You walked before you could run
Tall as a Koa you now stand
An image of your father
Now the man I depend on
My  Koa, strength,
Hope and dream

Monday, June 27, 2011

Annotated bibliography

Colleen Wallis      Summer 2011
Can art and writing be integrated to support each content area?

ANNOTATED BIBLIOGRAPHY
Hill, M. H. (1997). Art to writing: The healer, the catalyst. Voices from the Middle, 4(3), 17-29.          
Dr. Hill, an assistant professor at the University of Houston, worked with incarcerated teenage parents on literacy skills. She tells teachers that from the beginning of time, man’s earliest forms of written expression, from petro glyphs to calligraphy to hieroglyphs, art has always been a part of communication.  Art and writing are inseparable. Hands on help with students from every situation, has shown that reluctant writers and readers have changed their perspective when encouraged to do artwork first.   She says, “It was through art that young writers began to see themselves as writers.” Her observations and that of her colleague is that art is the key that enables the students to focus, to organize their thoughts and finally to write their thoughts based on their art work.   Through their work with young parents, they are able to assist them to grow not only as responsible parents but also readers.  By having them create their own Alphabet books and puppets, these young parents are able to present and dramatize their stories and write scripts and words.  It is through art that they begin to see literature and writing as inseparable.

McNeese, T. (1989). Raiders of the lost art: Using the “painted word” in writing. English Journal. 34-36 Retrieved from http://www.jstor.org.
McNeese makes observations from his own earlier days as a teacher, comparing them to the present. NcNeese makes the connection of his teacher introducing the study of paintings and tying them in with literature.  Basically, observation is the link to writing.  He states that whether it is through drama or a work of art, it is the relationship between the two and the telling of it through writing that bridges the connection.   Basically in the author’s interpretation, Art speaks.    His paper gives seventeen exercises combining writing with painting, each having its own theme and goal.  The exercises are made to show how close observation is fundamental to both visual and verbal expression.




Miller, S. R., & Hopper, P. F. (2010). Supporting goals through the visual arts. Reading Improvement, 47(1), 3-6. Retrieved from EBSCOhost.   

           Miller and Hopper are active members of The Mississippi Arts Commission whole school initiative program.  They have written this article for teachers and administrators of all secondary schools.  Their study was conducted in the Mississippi secondary schools.
              The authors profess that a strong arts program in schools enhances creativity, independent thinking and all other areas of students’ development.  They have found that those with strong art programs do better on achievement tests than do those with little or no arts in their curriculum. Students tend to feel that they have ownership of what they have learned so they have a higher perception of academic accomplishment.  Teachers of all subjects, art included have to be willing to integrate other subjects with literacy.  It’s up to the teachers to make sure that every student can read and comprehend what they are reading.  They state several strategies for use in the art classroom, such as:  Concept mapping, Journaling, outside reading and research assignments, comparing works of art, writing, Illustrating a short story, and much more.   They have found that ELL students benefit from visualizations.  They stress the importance of art whether through drama, performing or visual arts all benefit students by enhancing creative thinking and independent thinking.  They also found that the art helps to develop cognitive and social skills in young adults.

Olshansky, B. (2006). Artist/writers workshop: Focusing in on the art of writing. Language Arts, 83(6), 530-533.
Olshansky is a member of the National Council of teachers of English.     As a teacher of English workshop, she observed her students through her own classes.  These are her observations and findings. She found that reluctant students became more engaged when given the chance to create their own story and create in an art form first.   Students actually wanted to tell their story repeatedly and wanted to record their own words that had meaning to them.  Students were allowed to make collages first and then tell their stories.  The Writing becomes a step that they choose to record their words.   Her workshop was designed to treat words and pictures as an equal part in learning.  When given the opportunity to move from picture to writing back again, they were able to bridge the gap between writing and artwork. 






Raymond, A., & Broderick, P. ( 2007). Teaching and learning with the arts. Teaching K-8, 36-39. Retrieved from http://www.TeachingK-8.com.
Raymond and Broderick, as members of a teaching K-8 visiting team, visited 144 Vermont schools. The authors documented how by using art as part of their curriculum, teachers have successfully reached students who struggle academically, to achieve new heights in other subject areas.  The integration of the arts in the curriculum helped students blossom and become enthusiastic participants in classroom life. Those teachers, who had to incorporate art into their curriculum, found that they already had some form of latent art talent in their repertoire. Some were dancers, some writers, while others artists or just enthusiastic appreciators of art.   There are numerous resources available for all teachers to use as artifacts to teach visual thinking strategies to students.  Music and dancing as well as the visual arts can be incorporated into every subject.  All it takes is the commitment of the entire staff to integrate the arts across the curriculum.  The integration was federally funded and had an expiration date but it started a trend that continues until today.   Teachers are also learners, so they took classes, modeled what they learned to their students throughout the year.

Saturday, June 25, 2011

City of Refuge


City of Refuge “Honaunau”:  50th anniversary and cultural Festival
We arrived there on June 24, 2011 to do our place-based writing.   The Retirees of Pu’uhonua o Honaunau National Historical Park had set up all sorts of demonstrations and programs for all visitors and tourists to partake and learn some of the techniques the Hawaiians used to create things.   Though we were there to write, the desire to enjoy the day’s festivities and learn some new crafts took us away from writing for a while.   Some of us got right into it but for me, the draw of the coconut basket weaving was too strong.  I could not get my mind off of creating a basket.    As soon as someone called time, Jeanne and I hurried back to put our things into the car so we could go back to the site.  I had already sat in at the coconut broom making area but the basket weaving looked so inviting.  As it was one of the more popular displays, there were quite a few people waiting to weave.    We were told to remove our footwear and not to touch the stone structure adjacent to the site as it was a sacred area.

A simple sign should have been placed there but none were visible so we thought that the people were a bit rude.  Anyway, I wanted to make the basket so much that I eventually got in and sat with one of the instructors.   In the end, I had a young girl work with me and teach me how to tighten and complete my basket.  I was quite pleased with the results but wanted to make more.  I asked a lot of questions and made mental notes which I quickly wrote down on paper along with the weaving instructions.
This was the 50th Anniversary and annual cultural festival so I can go next year once again to learn a new skill such as how to make a musical instrument.  The festival is free for the public so it is a worthwhile place to visit and learn.
Our guide was an old friend from school days and he was dressed up like big Bird with a cape made of banana leaves woven onto a cape.  He explained how this refuge came to be and how those who had broken a law had to make it here by sea to take refuge.   He said if they managed to stay here for a certain amount of time, they were exonerated and could return to their village.   The wall behind the refuge is a thousand feet long and protects the sacred site. 
 There were about 48 different demonstrations going on at the same time.   The festivities will run until Sunday, the 26th with the entire same program being repeated for newcomers.    There were demonstrations of every kind and some that are scheduled only for Saturday and Sunday. 
Among the many that our group partook in were Ipu gourd making, haku lei making, coconut leaf weaving, kappa making, Bamboo stamp printing and net throwing.   We all wandered around to different areas as to suit our individual interests.
I took lots of photos and had so many in minds to paint but in the end, I opted to paint a picture of my friend, our story-teller against the background of the great wall and the canoe exhibition.

Thursday, June 23, 2011

ghost stories


Night Marchers

Many years ago, my father used to go camping and fishing in remote places in Kona..
He would often come home with tales of his adventures.  One night while sleeping on a bit of clearing, he said the feeling of pressure awakened him on his body.
He said he tried to waken Tadashi, his fishing buddy but Tadasi was fast asleep.
The next morning when he told his tale, some Hawaiian fishermen came by and told them they had been sleeping on the trail where the night marchers walk every night.  They decided to stay up to see if they could see them, but they saw nothing.  Dad never slept on that trail ever again.



GHOSTS

My dad has gotten to see ghost more often than the rest of us.   He told us of the day he and Tadashi went fishing and came cross an old shack.   He went to the old shack and an old woman with long white hair greeted him..  She offered him water and he thanked her.  He told Tadashi and brought him over to show him but she had disappeared.    Some other fishermen told dad that there used to an old Hawaiian woman living there long ago.

The real story of bungee jumping


PENTACOST JUMP: THE TRUE STORY OF HOW BUNGEE JUMPING

Many yeas ago,  on the island of Pentacost in Vanuatu, a village woman was running away from her husband who  wanted to beat his wife.  She ran into the forest and climbed up a huge banyan tree for shelter.  He saw her and climbed up after her with his machete.  She was terrified and tied a strong vine around her ankle.  As he approached and tried to ht her with the machete, she jumped off the huge branch. 

He thought she was just trying to get away from him so he jumped after her.   The vine she had tied to her foot saved her.  He husband fell to his death.

Ever since that day in island history,  the island of Pentacost holds a yearly jump where people from all over the world convene to watch young men and boys, climb up high platforms and attain manhood.

The structures are built on the hill sides so the jumpers head just barely touched the ground..

The amusing thing about this story is no women are allowed to participate in this ritual.  Only young men and boys are allowed to jump.  Yet it was a clever woman who had started this whole new sport, which today is the bungee jump.

This is true story

Drawing using Blind/regular contour line


Lesson Plan Template for Teaching Demonstrations
Name: Colleen Wallis
Length of Time:45 minutes
Grade:6,7, and 8th

HCPS Standards: 
Students understand and apply art materials, techniques, and processes to create original art works.

Content Concepts: Select materials, techniques, and processes to effectively communicate ideas.


GLO’S: Self-directed learner


Objectives: Upon given the instructions, students will work at their own pace to complete a one line drawing using only their eyes to guide their drawing.


Assessment(s) and or Evaluation:  Self –evaluation after each drawing is completed.



Resources:  Drawing on the Right side of the Brain



Beginning Procedures (Lesson Introduction/Anticipatory Set/Connection to Prior Knowledge) Students will begin drawing after given a demonstration.
A sheet of paper is taped down to the table so students will have their hands free to draw.  


Middle Procedures (Learning Activities)  Students will find a point on their paper to begin.  Hey are told to keep their eyes on their posed hand while their drawing hand records what their eyes see. 


Closing Procedures:
Once the drawing is completed, students can look at their work.  They are then asked to make a reflection of their feelings while executing this drawing.




Modifications for Diverse Learners: to challenge students to a more challenging task, students are then allowed to look at their paper as well as their hand and try to achieve a more detailed and carefully drawn image of their hand.
A reflection of this drawing is to follow the culmination of the drawing.



Teacher’s Reflection on Lesson:
This lesson is a good means of exposing students to the idea of a contour drawing and making an accurate rendering of a subject.
The reflections will help them to describe their feelings and get them started on their writing journals.